First Draft of Help Wanted

So as many of us have stated in earlier posts, a few of us here have written television pilots.
Edgar wrote one, Hudgens wrote one, Sam is writing one, Kylee wrote one also.
And well, so here's mine. I could REALLY use some feedback on it.
Help Wanted - First Draft - Episode 1

Read, Enjoy, Respond,
Michael Castellanos!

Heres My Script for Shortscriptwriting

Target
This script idea came to me in a dream. Its kind of a weird, twisted world.
A world were people can swat down bullets with katanas.
The dream for this script idea came from a daydream I had of a woman in a bloody wedding dress,
wielding a bloody katana.

What does it mean to be truly human,
Jonathan Hudgens (the animator)

If Any of My IDEA Friends Read the Blog.....

So I decided to post up the first draft of my script for short scriptwriting...
for the aforementioned....
Do you recognize the characters?

Dudes In College - Episode 1 - First Draft

Edgar van Aces
[Editors Note: IDEA is one of a few schools once attended by van Aces himself!]

It's Called Effin Clutch

So, I'm not your usually writer. No sir! I am a new breed of awesome. I like to bitch about my writing until the last minute and out of pure anger, disparity, and sick skills implemented into my brain by a certain 7/8th grade teacher, I killl my writing at the very last minute. I call this phenomenon clutch writing.

Yeah, We're Tired

As Hudgens said before me, a good chunk of us here a CTV have been up ALL night!
Doing what exactly?

New Idea for a TV Series

Title: The Wedding Dress Killer

Cell phone Commercials Are Just Begging To Be Made Fun Of

I was thinking. What if we made fun of Verizon's cell phone commercials. There would be a big crowd following this guy. The crowd wont leave him alone. He cant even have sex with his girl without the crowd being there.

I don't know.
It seemed like a good idea for a small film.

The forgotten friend,
Jonathan Hudgens

Hello from the other guy.

Hi, I'm Edgar van Aces. I am co-founder of Los Negritos Productions. I enjoy walking around with my shirt off and The Real World. I am mostly into making comedy movies that deal with serious topics. Most of my posts up here will be my brain bastards versus having actual movie ideas so deal with it. :)

Matter o' fact. I'll start right now. Speculation is that Hannah Montana will soon reach its final season and end its dreadful reign of tyranny over pre-teen girls. Thank God! So, inspired by this act of kindness from the rather harsh TV monarch Disney, I decided to do them a favor as well. Ladies and gentelmen, The Top 10 Ways to End Hannah Montana.

(Top 10 after the jump)